“Thank You”
My distress life has been overcome from depression
I felt the world was my enemy,
I realized there was a one person who I saw light shimmering
It was YOU.
You were sad when I was sad,
You were relieved when I was relieved,
There was no happy time in my life, but You, yourself made my life happy
Thank You.
Now I will be the one who makes you happy
I will stay with you no matter what
Just be who you are like the way you have been
And, stay in my heart.
It was good exposition, meditation, and revelation. however, you should some what develop the revelation part, because you have to show that you are praising it. Other wise it is fine, but you are little bit weak on praising so you should use dramatic words rather than figurative language
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